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Bionicle MOC: Sir Richard Alastair by Mana-Ramp-Matoran

Okay, with more views in mind, this MOC is for sure more unique and interesting with its colourscheme, different body style than the ty...

Bionicle MOC: Matteo by Mana-Ramp-Matoran

First, I'd like to say that I'm taking study time to do this critique so you better be happy. x'D Alright, Matteo has been going throug...

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SHIRO!!! BLARG!!!

[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong.
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur color
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual color
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change color
[x] They have wings
[/] They can grow extra body parts/ shapeshift(shapeshift)
[ ] They are immortal
[/] (if a female) they have large boobs(I'm gonna let you guys decide on that one)
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[x] They are very attractive to the opposite gender.
[x] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[x] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[x] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[x] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[x] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth/a young age
[x] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[x] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] The have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia

Overall points: 12.5


Take points off your OCs overall score if they fit any of the following statements:

[ ] They smoke
[ ] They are an alcoholic
[ ] They are overweight
[ ] They are addicted to drugs
[x] They have a short temper
[ ] They enjoy bullying others
[ ] They do not care much about others
[ ] They are emotionless


Point Reductions: 0


Final score: 9...

Balanced...phew! Looks like a gem but not annoying! :D


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5 Anti-Sue/Stu
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit.


6-15 Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though.


16-25 Borderline Mary-Sue/Gary-Stu
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.

26  Mary-Sue/Gary-Stu

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KuroEtShiro
Vandi/Divan Ly
Canada
Hi~! Yes this is KuroEtShiro from YouTube and Vandi Ly from MOCpages. I just take fancier or earlier pics of my MOCs and TRY to put in other stuff for fun. xD

Current Residence: A house
deviantWEAR sizing preference: Whaaaaa...?
Print preference: Way too cheap la~
Favourite genre of music: Rock, Pop, Metal
Favourite photographer: John Wood
Favourite style of art: derp...
Operating System: Windows 7, think gamer
MP3 player of choice: Archos 3 Vision, think price
Shell of choice: As in?
Wallpaper of choice: Domo
Skin of choice: ...?
Favourite cartoon character: There's a lot
Personal Quote: Life isn't fair, but that doesn't allow you to be a jerk.
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:icondeviantartistmax:
DeviantArtistMax Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy birthday!
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Shadowstyle143 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
hello, with your perrmission, may i join your Bionicle moc club group?
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DeviantArtistMax Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy Birthday!
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Vedkarrtheunbroken Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
make something, damn you!
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TheGigmagig Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Student
Happy Birthday man!
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Master-Cehk Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
happy birthday
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DeviantArtistMax Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy Birthday!
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Gale-OneOfMany Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the watch :D
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zephyrnic Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks for the fave bro! :D
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Galvaridarts Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012
Thanks for the Lego Moc :+fav:
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